Sunday, February 24, 2008

Phone Call

It was another one of those nights where I kept myself locked up in my room, away from the rest of the world. I was around twelve at the time, too young to understand death, but old enough to feel despair. My uncle was drunk, and I had no intention of going anywhere near him. This was happening a lot, so I was used to it. All I had to do was just make it through another night of screaming gibberish that even the neighbors weren’t too happy about. I would turn the TV on as loud as possible or play some music; sleeping wasn’t an option. At around 9 or so I heard the phone ring. My uncle didn’t answer it, because he was in no condition to hold a conversation. I didn’t answer it because if it was for him, what would I say? My uncle stood by the answering machine and listened; while I hid in the other room listening as well. I heard a familiar voice in complete panic. “Something’s wrong! She’s not moving. I don’t know what to do!” It was my stepfather. It was almost hard to believe it was him, having never heard him sound like this before. I was confused. My hands started shaking uncontrollably. Not because I was nervous, but because I didn’t know what to think. “Did something bad happen? Am I even awake, or is this a dream? Why is this happening now?” I left the room and acted like nothing happened; as if I never heard the call. I went to sleep that night totally in disbelief. I continued my thoughts and questions. “It never happened on TV like this, so it couldn’t be what I think it is. Everything was fine the last time we met. Do I even remember the last thing I said?” Somehow I managed to sleep that night. The next morning, I didn’t want to get out of bed, not because I was tired but because I didn’t want to know. “Maybe I was just overreacting”, I thought. When I went downstairs and into the kitchen the blank atmosphere struck my body automatically. I didn’t move. My uncle looked at me. “Your mom passed away last night,” he said.

1 comment:

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1. Explain how the writer uses the first sentence or two to grab the reader’s attention. If the opening doesn’t grab your attention, give the writer a suggestion on how to do so.
2. What is your favorite line from the story? Why?
3. Quote the section that contains the most vivid sensory details.
4. What section could be improved through more detailed description including sensory details?
5. Does the ending wrap up the story?
6. What is clever and/or lively about the ending?
1. Yes the writer did grab my attention. Why was he locked up in his room? Why did he want to be away from the world?
2. nothing
3. “all I had to do……..gibberish that the neighbors wasn’t even happy about.”
4. everything was good ,but put more detail into what happen, who else was in the house? Or something but everything was good…good suspense.
5. yes
6. he builds up suspense then let us know at the end