Wednesday, February 27, 2008
So-Called DAD
I always wondered what it felt like to be a daddy's girl. I never experienced such a feeling. My mother played both roles. Don't get me wrong, I have a father. I know him and have talked to him plenty of times. He's what you call a "dead-beat" dad. My dads name is Melvin Downs. I never really liked him. Since I could remember, he never did anything for me or y brothers. No shopping, no games, no food shopping. no money, no nothing. When I was younger, I probably saw my dad every once in a while. He would take me out sometimes. He always rolled up to my house in one of his nice ass cars while we had to catch SEPTA. All that stopped abruptly. My father paid more attention to his other families then he did with us. No school functions, graduations, meetings, nothing. He has this wife named Dawn, with whom he cheated on my mom with. Then he has his mistress, Jessica; a puerto rican chick he's been messing with since he was with my mom back then. Present day, he has two babies with Dawn; my little brother Jared and my little sister Joelle. Jessica has a daughter named Chelsea who everyone thinks is my dads. Anyway, Melvin spends all his time with his two other families while his first family carries on their lives without him. Personally, I never needed a father in the first place because he can't teach me anything I don't already know. I can get the male perspective of life from other people. If it wasn't for Melvin, I probably wouldn't be the way I am now. Independent, motivated, and not letting anything get in my way. Especially no man. Thank you Mel for not being there.
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1.Explain how the writer uses the first sentence or two to grab the reader’s attention. If the opening doesn’t grab your attention, give the writer a suggestion on how to do so.
~iT GRABS Mii ATT3NTi0N B3CAUS3 i WANNA KN0 M0R3 AB0UT H3R N0 G00D DADDii BUT Y0U CAN US3 S0M3 M0R3 SUSP3NS3 B3CAUS3 i ALR3ADii KN0 WHAT TH3 ST0RY iS G0iN T0 B3 AB0UT
2.What is your favorite line from the story? Why?
~"If it wasn't for Melvin, I probably wouldn't be the way I am now. Independent, motivated, and not letting anything get in my way. Especially no man. Thank you Mel for not being there." B3CAUS3 iT SH0WS N0 MAN WiLL BRiNG Mii SiSQ0 D0WN 3V3N DA 1 WH0 MAD3 H3R
3.Quote the section that contains the most vivid sensory details.
~iT iSNT V3RY D3TAiL3D USiNG S3NS0RY BUT D03SNT R3ALLY HAV3 T0 B3CAUS3 i ALR3ADii HAV3 A PiC iN Mii H3AD
4.What section could be improved through more detailed description including sensory details?
~TH3 3NTiR3 ST0RY C0ULD US3 M0R3 D3TAiLiNG BUT i THiNK iT W0ULD RUiN TH3 3FF3CTS 0F TH3 ST0RY B3CAUS3 iT WiLL S33M LiK3 SH3 iS TRYiNG T0 PULL T00 MUCH 0UT TH3 BUTT
5.Does the ending wrap up the story?
What is clever and/or lively about the ending?
~Y3S TH3 ST0RY WRAPS UP P3RF3CTLY. WHAT iS CL3V3R AB0UT TH3 3NDiNG iS iT MAK3S M3 L00K AT TH3 FRi3ND i HAV3 T0DAY AN S33 WHY SH3 iS LiK3 SH3 iS [S000 FRiGGiN RAD!!!]
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