Wednesday, February 27, 2008
The Dilemma Between My Boyfriend And My Boo{fINal DrAFt}
"Let me know now and do not lie! Do you mess with her yes or no?” This is how it all started, my dilemma between my boyfriend and my boo. Did you ever think someone you were dealing with was cheating so you went on and did you? Well I have. It was this past summer and me and my boyfriend were doing as good as any couple should be. We snuck every chance we could get to see each other and sneaking was my thing because I always loved the excitement. I had just started my job at Target and I was glad to even be working he would come up there every once in a while to come see and check up on me just to make sure I was doing the right thing. Well as the summer went on and I went out with my girls to have fun there were things that I began to hear concerning my boyfriend. This one little girl always had my boyfriend name in her mouth Troy, Troy, Troy. To tell you the truth the only thing that saved her was her sister because we were cool but no crust bucket, unfortunate , goldigging, young skeezer is going to keep saying that she mess with my man with a name like Champaine. I got sick of hearing about it so I confronted troy about it and of course like any other boy he denied it. I asked him several times about this situation but all he said was she is a little girl , she has nothing on you so stop stressing yourself out, me being dumb I believed him and time went on. Work was doing good and that was the only time I had to think. At my job was this boy named Anthony and he was always on my top but I never gave him the time of the day but one day I decided to call him he was real cool on the phone and we chilled often and he became my boo. Troy wasn’t even an issue because I was doing me and I could care less on what he was doing. One day Anthony said to me that he wasn’t going to let me have my cake and eat it too forever and that made me think who do I really want to be with. After that not only did me and Anthony have conflict in our relationship me and Troy were too because I wasn’t paying his ass any mind so he knew something was going on. Me and Anthony got better overtime and I found a way to even out Troy and Anthony. But one day I decided to go on my space just to browse the net and of course I went on the jawn Champaine page and she had shit on there about my boyfriend I aint sweat it because I was doin me but at the same time it hurted. The stuff she had up there didn’t exactly say stuff about him but I knew that he was who she was talking about. Once again I confronted him and he denied it again but now I cannot deal with the deceitful lies so now I figured that it was time to leave this grown man alone. I told him that i couldnt deal with all the lies he was telling and if he would just be real about the situation everything would be so much better. He swore up and down about everything but I knew better to believe him and despite all that everyone else was saying "girl forget her she dont have nothin on you " but what they failed to realize was that my feelings were being hurt. Anthony was getiing tired of being on the side and i felt bad because he made me feel good when i was talking to him or around him so i started to ask myself how could i waste this and then be mad if i make the wrong decision. Finally when i got the guts and Troy started to get on my nerves more I broke it off with him. of course anthony didnt believe me because troy still was calling but hey what can i say he missed me and you could never realize how much something meant to you until its gone and im so over him.
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1. Explain how the writer uses the first sentence or two to grab the reader’s attention. If the opening doesn’t grab your attention, give the writer a suggestion on how to do so. The writer grabs my attention by using a quote. She starts off with a conversation that she was having. It made me want to know more. She forgot to put a quotation mark in the beginning of the quote.
2. What is your favorite line from the story? Why?
3. Quote the section that contains the most vivid sensory details. What section could be improved through more detailed description including sensory details? The section with the most vivid sensory details would be the line when she says, “no crust bucket, unfortunate , goldigging, young skeezer is going to keep saying that she mess with my man with a name like Champaine.” The section that could be improved is when she talks about when she confronts him. She could explain more about what he said and talk more about the other boy.
4. Does the ending wrap up the story? Yes the ending wraps up the story
5.What is clever and/or lively about the ending? The ending goes along with the beginning. She opens the story with a question that was asked in a conversation, and at the ending basically answers it.
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