Thursday, February 28, 2008

My Freshmen Year

My Freshmen Year
I was so nervious because i didnt know what was going to happen. I was getting suspended in the first couple of months of my first year in high school I thought my parents were going to go off in the deans office when they came to the school. "Well you know Rayvon did this, and Rayvon did that," My dean said. From the look at my mom face i knew everything was going to be shutdown. No t.v., no computer, no parites, no nothiong. My mom asked a couple of questions, and the dean escorted us out his office. Looking at my freind coming down the hallway, he gave me that look like, you going to get it when u get home, and i gave that look like i know. The ride back home was weird. My mom was talking to my dad, and my parents almost always agree with each other. Im like all man!I know my dad really wasnt upset cause he was the cooler parent, but i knew my mom wanted to reach in the back of that seat and tear me apart. I got home around 1:30pm and i thought i was done for. I ran so fast upstairs to try to put some extra clothes on so the belt wouldnt hurt as bad, but she just left out and went back to work. Actually, she just said, "dont go nowhere, touch the phone, etc." I knew it wasnt the end though, i've gotten in way more trouble than this and i know a lecture wasnt the only thing thats coming with this suspension. Hours went by and all I could do is think about what is she going to do when she got home at 4:30. Sittin' in my room trying to think of some lies i could make up, so I would not have to get this beatin', but i knew i was going to get it, so i just chalked it up. So 4:30 come, and i hear them keys hit the door, and im thinking to myself like dang, what can i do. I knew if i acted liked i wasnt in the house she was going to beat for that, I really didnt want to chalk it but I had no choice. "Yea girl, guess what Rayvon did..." im like she going to the whole world i got suspended, now everytime i can go somewhere they goin' be like,"Ummmhhhh...there he go acting all innocent..."So after dinner time im still wonderin is she still going to do it, is she that mad she goin' to kill me, or is she even mad?Afterwards everybody just went to bed. I was so confused, the next morning im sleeping good because im like, no beating for me!! She comes in my room and wake me up, but she had her hands around her back. "So you like acting up in school?", she asked me, so i said no of course. Next thing i know i found out what was around her back. She had this long, thick extension cord, and she swung that cord around and, i thought i saw Jesus. She tried to hit me again, but i dipped it and ran out the room. I tried to run downstairs, but she whipped that extension cord around the banister and it hip me right in the mouth. I just kept on running til' I got outside, meanwhile its like the middle of winter and im outside wit some pajama pants on, and a t-shirt with nothing on my feet. My next door neighbor come outside, and seen what was happening, so she tried to help my mom calm down so i can get back in the house. I dont know what she said but it worked and she let me back in the house. When i got back in the house she said she was calm and put the cord down. But the catch is after all that, she still made me go to school damn near half dead, and she made sure i got there on time. As i get older, I can laugh at myself and say haw crazy it was but my mom was only doing her job, and i love her for that...

1 comment:

JGREEN said...

1. Explain how the writer uses the first sentence or two to grab the reader’s attention. If the opening doesn’t grab your attention, give the writer a suggestion on how to do so.

The beginning grabbed my attention because I pretty much knew that the rest of the story was going to be about you getting in trouble.

2. What is your favorite line from the story? Why?

My favorite line was "Yea girl, guess what Rayvon did..." im like she going to the whole world I got suspended. That was my favorite line cause I be mad when my mom want to go telling everybody what I did then somebody always got something to say about it.

3. Quote the section that contains the most vivid sensory details.

Looking at my friend coming down the hallway, he gave me that look like, you going to get it when u get home, and I gave that look like I know.

4. What section could be improved through more detailed description including sensory details?

You should say how you felt at the part when your mom decided not to beat you right away

5. Does the ending wrap up the story?

Yea then ending pretty much wraps up the story


6. What is clever and/ or lively about the ending?

Yes it was lively because it pretty much ends at the part where he got beat (lol) and he wrapped it up pretty well by saying he thanks his mom for doing what she did.