“Come on before we get points deducted for you being so clumsy” I said as I helped Natanya up while everyone ran past us. Today couldn’t have taken any longer to come; it was the day of my first cheerleading competition. I was up for what seemed like all night the night before, getting my hair done with the rest of my team. My alarm went off at 7:00, but I was already up and getting ready to take a shower. After my shower I woke up my cousins and went to put on my burgundy, gold and white; North Philly Aztecs cheerleading uniform. Next I unwrapped my freshly done ponytail and went into my moms room so she could put my ribbons, that matched my uniform, into my hair. When I went into her room she was already waiting for me so I sat on her bed and popped my dad with a bally until he got up. When I was completely ready I ran downstairs with my dad. My mom went to heat up the car and my dad took me and my cousins to the kitchen so we could eat breakfast. After we ate me and my 4 cousins piled into my moms car and waited for my parents to come get into the car, we couldn’t wait to get there. After about 5 minutes they finally got into the car and we left. When we arrived at the competition it was 9:30 so we went to meet up with the rest of my team. As soon as we found our team we went to the practice spot to practice our routine for the last time. While we were practicing two of our stunts fell. This was around the time I began to feel nervous, I kept feeling like we were going to mess up when we went out onto the floor. I sat with my team watching all the other teams perform; some were good while others weren’t really that great. After a while I began to get anxious until they announced that after intermission my team would be going on to perform. We all got some water then went to line up so that we could go on in about 5 minutes. When they announced my teams name my stomach was in knots. We began to run out and as soon as we got to the mat the girl in front of me named Natanya tripped and I almost fell over her but I stopped just in time to help her up. “Come on before we get points deducted for you being so clumsy” I said as I helped Natanya up while everyone ran past us. Then me and her went onto the floor and lined up in our given spots and plastered smiles onto our faces. We had 30 seconds before our music would begin and this is when I looked around and even though there was no more than 150 people there it seem liked there was so many more. Then the music began and we did our routine, which was only 3 minutes long and i was so nervous for all 3 of those minutes . We didn’t drop any stunts and it seemed like everyone was together. I was so happy that it was over but I wanted to go again. When everything was over with and they placed us they told us that we had came in second place and we were so excited and we thought we were now going to the state competition but then we found out that we were too young to even qualify. They busted our bubble and one girl even started crying. But I was still happy that we did so well and came in second place.
1. Explain how the writer uses the first sentence or two to grab the reader’s attention. If the opening doesn’t grab your attention, give the writer a suggestion on how to do so.For the most part it was interesting because i wanted to know why were they going to get points taking off..
2. What is your favorite line from the story? Why?While we were practicing two of our stunts fell. This is my favorite line because its kinda forshadowing whats going to happen..
3. Quote the section that contains the most vivid sensory details.After my shower I woke up my cousins and went to put on my burgundy, gold and white; North Philly Aztecs cheerleading uniform. Next I unwrapped my freshly done ponytail and went into my moms room so she could put my ribbons...
4. What section could be improved through more detailed description including sensory details?how she felt when she was actually doing the routine
5. Does the ending wrap up the story?yes the ending wraps up the whole story. She won second place and such. Gave a fair conclusion.
6. What is clever and/or lively about the ending?how it switched from her whole teaming messing up in practice and then being able to complete the task at the end.
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1. Explain how the writer uses the first sentence or two to grab the reader’s attention. If the opening doesn’t grab your attention, give the writer a suggestion on how to do so.
For the most part it was interesting because i wanted to know why were they going to get points taking off..
2. What is your favorite line from the story? Why?
While we were practicing two of our stunts fell. This is my favorite line because its kinda forshadowing whats going to happen..
3. Quote the section that contains the most vivid sensory details.
After my shower I woke up my cousins and went to put on my burgundy, gold and white; North Philly Aztecs cheerleading uniform. Next I unwrapped my freshly done ponytail and went into my moms room so she could put my ribbons...
4. What section could be improved through more detailed description including sensory details?
how she felt when she was actually doing the routine
5. Does the ending wrap up the story?
yes the ending wraps up the whole story. She won second place and such. Gave a fair conclusion.
6. What is clever and/or lively about the ending?
how it switched from her whole teaming messing up in practice and then being able to complete the task at the end.
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