Truly Missed (Final Draft)

"Are you going out tonight?" My mom asked me, while driving me home from I work." Yea, since im off tomorrow". She looked at me with her face expression which meaning she didn’t want me out the house that night. I’m hardheaded so I acted as if she wasn’t looking my way. I walked into the house showered quickly, got dressed and before I left I told my mom bye and I loved her." Oh you’re leaving?" she asked surprised and I answered "Yes" and I closed the door behind me. There were 4 of us in the car, on our way to the party we were invited to. At all the parties we went to, everyone got along and No Limit was expected to be at everyone. No limit wasn’t a gang, squad or whatever else people would want to call them. They were more like brothers that stuck together no matter what. They were always my highlight every weekend.They knew how to live life without worrying about, what others about of them. Just to see them dance, laugh and have fun made me smile. When we arrived at the party we parked up and stood in the car for a couple of minutes. While we were getting out, me and my friends watched as No Limit walked into the party before us. The party wasn't as we expected so we didn't stay long at all. We just stopped in so they wouldn't complain that we didnt. When me and my friends left the party we made a quick stop at a friend’s house before we were on our way to another.This was a normal routine for us. Twenty minutes went by and I received a phone call which read "Home" on the screen of my phone. I answered thinking it was my mom “I’ll be home in a little bit mom" I heard silence "Hello?" my brother then started to talk. My friends saw my face expression change from smiling to disbelief "ok I'll be there now".. I could hardly blink. My friends kept on asking what was going on. But it wouldn't come out, all I can say was "Let’s go. We have to go around my house. No Limit has just got into a car accident". Two of my friends jaws dropped and the other 2 started dialing numbers " We don’t have time for that lets go!!" When we got there we didn’t think it was going to be as bad. Everything was blocked off, so we had to go around the corner, get out the car and run to the scene. When we got there people were crying and calming each other down. The police were telling everyone to leave the scene. We knew this was serious.I saw one of my friends walking up to me, covering her face. "I cant look" she sobbed. I opened my arms to give her a hug, while looking over her shoulder.I then realized there was a white sheet on the ground covering one of the bodies.The police then gave us a second warning. Everyone slowly left the scene, but since it was 2 blocks away from my house, I walked home to put my thoughts together. My hands were shaking and I couldn’t wait to sit down. I walked into the house and asked my brother how did he know all of this had happened. He saw it all. They were hit by a drunk driver. He was just waiting for the bus and he never saw anything like it. There were six of them in the car and slowly throughout that night, it ended as nightmare. 3 dead, 2 injured and 1 paralyzed. I couldn't believe it, I just wanted to wake up and it will all be over.Macho, 19, Fredo, 19 and Lou, 17 were the ones that pasted.They didn't get to live theitr life the way I knew they wanted to.They were well known and the best people to be around, especially at a party. No limit will not be the same without them. Love the ones in your life, you never know when they can be gone. It’s been a month now and I’ve become stronger. I miss you guys.

1.) The writer uses dialogue to grab my attention.
2.) My favorite line is “3 dead, 2 injured and 1 paralyzed.” This sentence makes me think about some of the many good people that I have lost in my life.
3.) This section had the most scenery. “Everything was blocked off, so we had to go around the corner, get out the car and run to the scene. When we got there people were crying and calming each other down. The police were telling everyone to leave the scene. We knew this was serious, when we saw a white sheet covering a body lying on the ground. Everyone left the scene, but since it was just 2 blocks away from my house, I walked home to put my thoughts together. My hands were shaking and I couldn’t wait to sit down. I walked into the house and asked my brother how did he know all of this had happened. He saw it all. They were hit by a drink driver. He was just waiting for the bus and he never saw anything like it. There were six of them in the car and slowly throughout that night, it ended as nightmare. 3 dead, 2 injured and 1 paralyzed.”
4.) “We knew this was serious, when we saw a white sheet covering a body lying on the ground.” This part could have more details because I would like to know more of what she saw. After she says this she just says that she goes home.
5.) Yes the ending wraps up the story.
6.) She gives a few words of inspiration to anyone who has lost someone.