FIRST DAY OF KINDERGARTEN COULDN'T GET NO BETTER!

“Oh my God who did that to you, came here Jeannette.” My mom pulled me towards her. She grabbed my head and leaned it down. I was confused because I didn’t know what she was talking about. I had pink bubble gum stuck in one of my braids. I just couldn’t believe it. The day was so perfect. The sun was shinny. The temperature was just right. It wasn’t too hot or too cold. I had on my brand new outfit. I had on some black, white, and blue Reeboks, with some loose blue jeans, and a black fitted shirt. My mom just put my hair in six braids that same morning. I had my brand new pink Barbie book bag, with my new crayons, notebooks, and pencils. It was about 8:15 when my mom and me left the house. When I arrived at school, my mom gave me a tight hug. She said she would come and get me later on. I made her pinky swear me and then she left. When I reached the front door of the classroom I was a bit shy. I didn’t know what to expect. At the door, there stood a brown skin, chubby lady. Her hair was a little down her back. She had a nice little spring dress on, with some open toe sandals. She looked my way and said hi I’m your new teacher. She said my name is Mrs. Smith. That when we both entered the room. The room was colorful. It had a bunch of numbers and letters all around it. I had a section full with toys and books. She sat me down at a table with my name on it. After about twenty minutes the classroom was full with children. At my table the were three girls and one boy including me. When I greeted everyone at the table there was girl who didn’t speak. Her name was Alicia. Alicia was short and light skin. Her hair was about shoulder length. She had on a white shirt, with the matching sneakers. I guess she was having a bad that morning. I just turned my face and acted like nothing happen. The day was going by so well. So far we colored, and draw pictures of our family. We had go into a circle and told everyone in the room our names and age. Then we went t lunch for about an hour and then we came back to the classroom. This was the best time of the day, free time. I was at the corner playing with the blocks. Then that is when Alicia came over. She tried to take the block out of my hand. That’s when we started fussing back and forth for it. I let it go and Alicia fall back. She got up and it me on my hand. That’s when we started fighting. We hit each other a couple times and that’s when our teacher broke it up. Alicia got a good hit off me, right in the back of my head. I guess that’s when she snuck that piece of bubble gum in my braid. I just couldn’t believe that she would do something like that. It was the first day of kindergarten and I already I was fighting. My mom took me in her room while she tried to take the gum out my hair. When my mom cut my hair, all I could think about was that freaking Alicia. I just was going to get her back.


1. This opening does interest me because it pulls me into thinking as to how and why she got bubblegum in her hair.
2. I think the narrative will be about a situation that resulted in her getting bubblegum in her hair somehow.
3. It was her first day of school. She somehow got bubblegum in her hair when she came home from school after the first day.
4. Things I liked best were the descriptions of the day and the physical traits of all the characters were described.
5. Things I would like to know more about is what happened after that day when her mom got the bubblegum out of her hair.