I was really starting to grow up my summer going into 5th grade.I hung around older kids, did my own hair,picked out my own clothes,went to the mall with my friends alone,but there was one thing i really wanted that my mom just wouldnt let me have......A pair of heels! I begged my mom to buy me a pair of heels but she just wouldnt give in. She said "Shavon they are too grown and you are a child".I really couldn't argue with her because there is NO arguing with my mom.If i would have gotten mad she would have slapped me into a different timezone. Anyway, it was back to school time so that meant shopping and my mom only brought me sneakers and some maryjane looking shoes that i hated.I went out side to vent to my neighbors about how my mom was so over protective of the little things while their mom's were so cool about everything compared to my mom. Later on that night after playing hard outside with my friends i went in my room and saw a red shoe box on my bed. Inside the box was a pair of size 5 wedges on my bed. They were tan with blue woven in the heel and had a pretty woven flower on the top. I kicked off my dogged Nike’s and stuck my foot in the pretty shoe. I could not wait to show these off.I asked my mom what made her get them and she said that she felt i was responsible enofe to have a pair that didnt look too grown. I kept them in the box because my mom would not let me wear them all the time, but one day she let me. I guess she was in a good mood. I wore a blue dress with flowers that my shoes complemented perfectly. Everyone wanted to know where I got them from and I honestly told them, I did not know because my mom bought them. Most people back then used that excuse as a lie because they didn’t want anyone to know where they got their gear from but I was telling the truth. My whole day went good. My 6th girlfriends were proud of me. Everything was going perfect until.............Recess! My day went great, it really did but the un-thinkable happened. Why? Who knows, but anyways this is what happened at recess that day. Walking up the steps to the school yard the breeze felt good, as my long pony tails blew with the flow of my dress. The sun was really blinding my eyes but I managed to see what I needed to.I saw a husky black shadow walking up to me with the sun behind it. As the shadow got closer I then saw the shadow with a smile. I thought I was hallucinating because it looked like some kind of creature off a cartoon. The shadow walked up to me and I saw Mikeisha. She then yelled with her squeaky voice “LOOK SHAVON”!!! She stuck her arm out dingling something in my face. I couldn’t make out what it was because of the sun I Just saw something that was fuzzy with a million legs in my face. it was a caterpillar.I passed out. I literally stumbled back and fell on my back laying on the ground, not to mention with my eyes closed, Oh and my dress was up. When I snapped back into reality I sat up and fixed my dress and walked over to my friends in embarrassment. They asked me if I wanted to play rope I said yes to get what just happened off my mind. When it was my turn to jump I forgot to take off my heels and I jumped in the rope. Two good jumps I felt my small ankle crack then I fell again. Only this time I hurt myself. I sprung my ankle............I never wore heels again untill 10th grade.
by Shavon
Tuesday, February 12, 2008
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
3 comments:
SHAV0NS A L0S3R!!!!!!!!!!!
1.The opening sentence doesnt interest me at all because it dont grasp my attention. You should combine your first two sentences and dont use "half point"
2.I think this narrative will be about Shavon thinking she is almost grown and her wanting to do things that make her feel grown.
3.Shavon was getting older and she wanted to seeem older so she ask her mother to buy he heels, since older people wear those.
4.Things I like best were the fact that it was easy to picture this incident.
5.Things I would like to know more about is what made your mother decide to buy the heels for you after she said no.
shavon i thought your story was pretty funny and it was interesting except....when you spelled the word ENOUGH like ENOFE im really mad you did that but fix it .. fix it quick.
Post a Comment