Tuesday, February 12, 2008

FIRST TIME I GOT IN BIG TROUBLE FINAL DRAFT

I cried uncontrollably and waited until the adrenaline rush finally hit me. My sisters and I used to go to my aunt's daycare every day after school until my dad got off from work. The reason I got in trouble was so extreme that I just couldn't forget it, not even until this day. First, I was offered a sandwich by my aunt; she owned the daycare. I began to eat the sandwich then I realized that it was nasty. I just didn't want to eat it because of the way she made it. At the same time, I didn't want to make her feel ambarassed or upset that I didn't like her sandwich. So I made my decision to throw away the sandwich without telling her that I didn't finish eating it because it was nasty. She approached me with suspicion and asked me did I finish eating the sandwich. I lied and said yes because I didn't want to hurt her feelings. I was only seven years old and I didn't know how she would take it, knowing that I disliked her sandwich. She must have known that I didn't eat the sandwich or maybe she saw me throw it away. After I lied about eating the sandwich, she checked the trashcan and found it in there. By then, I felt twice as stupid because I had already lied and I had gotten caught. I must not have tucked the sandwich deep into the trash can far enough because she found the sandwich right when she looked in the trash can. She yelled at me and I got in so much trouble. I was young so I never understood why she got mad at me for trying to spare her feelings of making a terrible sandwich. Once my father picked us up from the daycare, my aunt told him that I threw my sandwich in the trash. He told my sister and I to go home, which was right across the street, and get ready for a beating. We were so scared and confused. First of all, my sister didn't do anything so why was she gettin in trouble too? Secondly, I didn't want to hurt my aunt's feelings about the disgusting sandwich so I simply threw it away. Why would I get in trouble for that? Last, why should I get a beating for not eating food, even if I just wanted to throw it away? So my sister and I went across the street to our house and got ready to get in more trouble by my dad. Once he came in the house, we got our beating and my sister was so mad at me that she got in trouble. But that wasn't my fault, I never knew why he punished her too. As of today, I do realize why I did get in trouble, even though it was pointless. I lied. I got in trouble by my aunt and my father because I had lied. Back then I didn't realize that lying is such a bad thing when you're young. But as of today, I still don't agree with the beating part. I was young, they could have understood why I lied. Don't you agree?

1 comment:

jeannette said...

1 Does this opening interest you? Explain. If it does not, suggest a way to make it better.
2 What do you think the narrative will be about?
3 Summarize the narrative in one or two sentences.
4 Finish this statement: Things I liked best were…
5 Complete this statement: Things I would like to know more about were…


1. Yes the opening sentence interest me. It makes me want to know why she is crying.
2. This narrative will be about something that took place in a daycare.
3. A girl gets in trouble for throwing her sandwich away.
4. Things I liked best were the opening sentence, and the way she describe her emotions.
5. Things I would like to know more about were the weather, the setting in the room.